The Dolphin Blog the News team at Old Moat Primary have been exploring the Titanic Disaster. Bethany the story-writer has written a lovely piece that takes us aboard the ship on that fateful voyage. This is a lightly-edited version of the original story, accompanied by Ryan’s Photopeach slideshow.
One loud, noisy morning everyone was screaming and shouting on the harbour. The Titanic – the largest, most grand ship ever made by man was about to launch. Everyone was waving to their friends and relatives with the exception of one girl. Lucy Williams was walking across the foot-bridge feeling upset at having nobody to wave her off.
”Hello and welcome aboard the Titanic. Are you 1st, 2nd, or 3rd class and have you got your ticket? “asked the ticket man standing at the door of the ship.
“Well I’m 1st class and here is my ticket,” explained Lucy.
When she got aboard she was offered a cup of tea that she did not really want but she drank it anyway. When she arrived in the 1st class cabin she was impressed with the clean, luxurious room. That afternoon she had dinner with Polly from a neighbouring cabin. Her friend was in second class and called Kasey and she had dinner next to her husband max. Later she had tea and went to her cabin and went to bed.
The next day she walked all over the Titanic and she was even more impressed. She saw her friend below her “Hi Kasey where`s max,”she shouted “he’s in a bar see you later!” she shouted back. Polly came over and told her to have a walk with her. That night she missed her friend and then she went to sleep.
The next day, Lucy went and saw max and Kasey and she had breakfast with them. Then she went and read a book in the library that night she had a long day so she dozed off.
“BANG BANG BANG!!! Get your life jackets on! Wake up! Quickly! Go to the deck and wait there!” shouted a crew member. Polly, Lucy, Max and Kasey had woken up with a start and as soon as the words had sunk in, they did as they were asked. They arrived on deck, tired and confused.
”Why are we here Max? I’m tired. What’s happening? “asked Kasey. Polly and Lucy were scared too and were told them about the horrific iceberg that was going to sink the unsinkable. Five minutes later the lifeboat was in the water with Max, Polly, Lucy and Kasey all safely aboard.
As they watched the Titanic sinking they all cried. Finally they were picked up by the Carpathia and arrived later in New York where they lived happily but never to forget what had happened to them on the Titantic.
Well done Bethany, we are so proud of our selves. Well done Tyler for the slide show, this has been an amazing experience. Its our first time online with blog the news and we have worked so hard researching the Titanic and our teacher is so proud of us.
I am really proud of our work
Wow, some amazing work class 11 and I am really proud of your achievements. Keep your ideas vibrant you are really creative, I really enjoy working with you all, well done!
Bethany I have one word to describe that amazing story and it is……….
FABULOUS!!! I now am going to give you two stars and a wish,
1st star:Very detailed writing,
2nd star:Awsome connestives,
Wish:Bethany I liked it but you could have use diffrent connectives and try not to always do the same one, Im not saying its bad but i extremely love your work, and also you really are famous so you are very lucky, because your now an………ATHUOR!!!
Wow Tyler, you have so many pictures for the Titanic slideshow, and the pictures also intrest people, also when they see all of our work they feel like going on our blog and looking, and commenting on our great work.:)
From Armin
I know we have worked so hard. I am now absolutely amazed of how much we have worked on the Titanic. I think we should be proud of ourselves because we are on blogthenews!
Well done to all at Old Moat Primary – and especially Bethany. I have enjoyed reading this short story, I felt tense reading this – especially the short sentences.
Well done everyone, a great effort.
We have done teamwork together in our class .We are a great class because we help each other and it feels like we are a big family.
this is so great bethany and i am all so proud off my titanic slide show
this is so great bethany and i am all so proud off my titanic slide show
Bethany great short story. great detail girl well done.
Tyler great slide show.
class11 you all done wonderful work based on the titanic. keep up the hard work. well done.
Bethany, you have written a wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it. Being an amateur writer myself, I know how good it can feel to develop characters and plots. Well done.
Great job I loved the story It was creative!
Great job I loved the story It was creative!!!!!!
Wow that is an a amazing story you must be a very creative person. I wish I could write a story like that it would come in handy to , I think you have done GREAT!